Well, got a nice review of 'The Bethlehem Fiasco' from YouWriteOn.com. Other than what you can see, it was all nitpicking stuff, a word here, a rephrasing there. And he noticed the stable door switch!!!:-)
"I liked this story, it wasn't what I'd expected. I think you succeeded
in making it humorous particularly with the three wise men being
portrayed as thieves and in your portrayal of God in the last chapter.
Your
use of dialogue is very good and certainly gives the reader a good
sense of each character as an individual and their personality; in
particular Gaspar and Michael. I would say this was one of the major
strengths of your work. The switch of setting and character POV between
each chapter was done very well too; also the switch between Jesus'
perspective and Joesph's through the sound of the stable door in chapter
2."
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